nathan1991
Registered User
Join date: Jan 2010
21 IQ
#1
see with my eyes
killed all the flies
i apologize
i apologize

walk your own shoes
you cant take mine
go too far
cross the line
said what you said
your feelings defined
turn on your heel
to change your mind

its too late now
i've resigned
i'm benign
i'm confined

see through my eyes
i cant appetize
mind unorganized
sit and agonize

but
i apologize
i apologize
i apologize
steve987
Registered User
Join date: Jan 2010
192 IQ
#2
>Looking Back

>See It Through My Eyes

>I Apologize

>Walk Your Own Shoes

>Across The Line
"Dreams fucking come true!" - Myles Kennedy
Mr.Pink101
Ribbed for her pleasure
Join date: Feb 2008
1,508 IQ
#3
Rhyme > content?

Doesn't work.

"I've resigned
I'm benign
I'm confined"

has about as much imagery as a steaming pile. Try writing with a clear story in mind.
Music is an art form that celebrates potential. So long as you're looking for it, you'll always find it.
nathan1991
Registered User
Join date: Jan 2010
21 IQ
#4
Mr pink 101, what imagery and clear story is needed?
it isnt a set of lyrics that aims to tell a story, and give descriptive imagery.
i aimed to get how i was feeling at the time into some lyrics.
thanks for the advice, obviously very useful.