TheWho845
Registered User
Join date: Jun 2012
98 IQ
#1
Just a little self assessment, if anyone is interested I could record it and post it. Its one of my writings I actually like, mostly because i just wrote it..


You


You've got
high hopes for a wonderful world
You've got
High hopes for the people there

But c'mon
What do you really
think of them

You put your soul
in a wooden box
You put your Heart
another one too
How could you
Every feeling you've ever had

You're feeling crazy
and you want to shout
You're feeling sad
And you want to pout
How about you
Let it all out

You hide your feelings
from your deepest friends
You hide your feelings
and you like to pretend
Do you really
Think you'd lose them To yourself?
FrozenNile
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Join date: Jul 2012
869 IQ
#2
I like it! It sounds like it could be a great acoustic piece.
TheWho845
Registered User
Join date: Jun 2012
98 IQ
#3
Thanks, it probably will be acoustic. It's the best thing I've ever written in my opinion.
whywefight
~I'm not fuckin around~
Join date: Dec 2010
1,765 IQ
#4
I like these lyrics, straight up and honest.
TVDDC
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Join date: Jan 2012
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#5
You know, when i read lyrics i'm always curious on what kind of track it is. i hope it is a acoustic song.
TheWho845
Registered User
Join date: Jun 2012
98 IQ
#6
I wrote it on my acoustic and its hot a finger picked guitar solo of the chord progression so it definitely will be acoustic. Thanks for the feedback
"And everyday i want to fly away
I'll never be happy until I cry all day"

Best thing I ever wrote
disrurbedbro
Registered User
Join date: Oct 2012
41 IQ
#7
Great job i think a slow fingerstyle acoustic backing will set you up for some bigtine sucsess


Can you help me write stuff like this.......straightforward and honest?
TheWho845
Registered User
Join date: Jun 2012
98 IQ
#8
Uh we'll you sort of just right it out lol
"And everyday i want to fly away
I'll never be happy until I cry all day"

Best thing I ever wrote
arthur_s
Registered User
Join date: Oct 2012
10 IQ
#9
Yes, record it with acoustic or harmonic accompaniment. Forum will listen to you
lububble17
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Join date: Jul 2012
77 IQ
#10
This is truly beautiful! i really wish i could hear it
disrurbedbro
Registered User
Join date: Oct 2012
41 IQ
#11
Hey, I came up with a way of converting tose lyrics into a hardcore/metal sound....Is it ok If i record myself doing this in my way? You have your ways and i can have mine.....noone is hurt....it is a new style that i am trying...Again...good song, but if i may please try this out in a way that i play on my own