#2
Hey bud,

I'm going to have to critique this from a compositional standpoint because I don't have that much experience with recording using microphones. Like I said before, I do all my stuff direct input to my computer and program the drums with superior drummer. I can let you know that the guitar is too loud in the mix; it completely overpowers the drums and it's clipping a little bit, so I would turn down the gain on your mic or pull the mic away from the amp a bit.

As far as the composition goes, you've got a good skeleton here. I like the progression the song opens with, the harmonies remind me of earlier Radiohead, like The Bends-era Radiohead. Something like "My Iron Lung". This song needs to be fleshed out though man. The rhythm guitar and the drums aren't enough to hold my attention. I know you haven't done the overdubs yet but there's plenty of room for some spacy, trippy guitar over that and the harmonies you have chosen do imply trippy, effects-laden leads.

As far as the drums go, from what I could hear, they were a bit sparse and I only recall hearing a few parts of the kit. I can't play drums at all and as far as composing goes, drums are probably my weakest point, so I probably can't help you much here.

As far as bridge blues goes, I liked that a lot more. The guitar kept my interest a lot more and the drumming was a lot better on that one. I do feel like you could have transitioned into that bit at 1:06 a little more smoothly though. Other than that, good.
#3
as far as recording goes I've only just recently started recording though a software program so i could only tell you little

if your looking for Equipment. Save up is all I could say maybe get you a 20-30watt to start out man unless your looking for something more. an amp with reverb would help your sound I think n I hear tube amps are good.

as far as your playing man , you have good rhythm n with the song I can picture it in my head what your playing reminds me of Jack white alittle

anyway Stone made some good pointers, For your Volume I would try to find that balance with guitar,bass,drums etc. I myself have had trouble with this in the past but if you could like the guitar could set the tone of the volume , bass maybe abit lower (when u do get a bass) and drums maybe right up there with guitar and yea I would turn down the gain on that thing abit

your drums i cant comment on ur doing better then me with that , I have a little Zune Foot pedal that i mostly use for its drum machine, but when recording through my Sonar LE software its kind of useless cuz i've found that I can only record it over an amp and even then it sounds horrible so I have to find something that works. but yea uhm just save up man no worries. this may or not be "good news" but Black friday is right around the corner
"its not the destination.... so much as the journey" one once said
Last edited by Marqway at Oct 24, 2012,
#4
true man thanks for the advice

Quote by Marqway
as far as recording goes I've only just recently started recording though a software program so i could only tell you little

if your looking for Equipment. Save up is all I could say maybe get you a 20-30watt to start out man unless your looking for something more. an amp with reverb would help your sound I think n I hear tube amps are good.

as far as your playing man , you have good rhythm n with the song I can picture it in my head what your playing reminds me of Jack white alittle

anyway Stone made some good pointers, For your Volume I would try to find that balance with guitar,bass,drums etc. I myself have had trouble with this in the past but if you could like the guitar could set the tone of the volume , bass maybe abit lower (when u do get a bass) and drums maybe right up there with guitar and yea I would turn down the gain on that thing abit

your drums i cant comment on ur doing better then me with that , I have a little Zune Foot pedal that i mostly use for its drum machine, but when recording through my Sonar LE software its kind of useless cuz i've found that I can only record it over an amp and even then it sounds horrible so I have to find something that works. but yea uhm just save up man no worries. this may or not be "good news" but Black friday is right around the corner
Last edited by jdenmo at Sep 20, 2017,
#5
you definitely got some nice ideas. the recording could use some work but like you said you're working on it so thats great! guitar wise it's nice, the only thin i can see quick improvements on is your timing with your solos. Other than that keep practicing dude! you sound good now, you'll sound great in a while

perfect practice makes perfect man.
#6
Hmm I heard a few hiccups but overall you've got a nice thing going here. They sound a bit like the same thing over and over though. Might want to change it up while playing some. (:
#7
hopefully add bass some time this week
Last edited by jdenmo at Sep 20, 2017,
#10
I wrote my comment and then I read you use iphone 4 for recording, so my advice won't be useful until you'll get some proper equipment, but I leave it like this and I hope it will help you some day in the future

I listened to "Time distortion" and "Bridge blues". Generally you've got nice ideas, but the drums need work, they lacking a lot. You could use some bass there too. The guitar tone is not bad, but I'd recommend to EQ guitar track better. I guess you could cut everything to 250 Hz (or less, start from 250 and then check lower values). You could also cut a bit at 800 Hz, it helped me a lot to get better sound and check these:

http://www.kvglabs.com/kermit/PDF/EQit.pdf

http://therecordingrevolution.com/2011/12/12/subtractive-eq-will-make-your-mixes-better/

Those things helped me a lot too. Cutting everything from 12 kHz (or higher, or lesser) can be helpful too.

I would also recommend (if you don't want to record the second rhythm guitar track) to copy and past the track you've already got, then pan one on the left (something like 75-80%) and the second one the same way on the right (though you have to set 13 ms delay, so they wouldn't interfere with each other, I don't mean delay as an echo effect only that second track should start 13 ms later than the first one).

All in all keep playing
#11
Quote by Michael87
I wrote my comment and then I read you use iphone 4 for recording, so my advice won't be useful until you'll get some proper equipment, but I leave it like this and I hope it will help you some day in the future

I listened to "Time distortion" and "Bridge blues". Generally you've got nice ideas, but the drums need work, they lacking a lot. You could use some bass there too. The guitar tone is not bad, but I'd recommend to EQ guitar track better. I guess you could cut everything to 250 Hz (or less, start from 250 and then check lower values). You could also cut a bit at 800 Hz, it helped me a lot to get better sound and check these:

http://www.kvglabs.com/kermit/PDF/EQit.pdf

http://therecordingrevolution.com/2011/12/12/subtractive-eq-will-make-your-mixes-better/

Those things helped me a lot too. Cutting everything from 12 kHz (or higher, or lesser) can be helpful too.

I would also recommend (if you don't want to record the second rhythm guitar track) to copy and past the track you've already got, then pan one on the left (something like 75-80%) and the second one the same way on the right (though you have to set 13 ms delay, so they wouldn't interfere with each other, I don't mean delay as an echo effect only that second track should start 13 ms later than the first one).

All in all keep playing


bit late in replying, but how does one paste one guitar track on the left? can you do this in FL studio 10 or sony vegas 9?