Something_Vague
Blanched in White Oars
Join date: Nov 2004
5,239 IQ
#1
In the abscebe of all crutches,
mother mother mother or online poker
called it like us often or often not
the cause for everything exists in our hands
running through chainlink fences,
tearing the tips off each one

and we leave our blood on the border
to our neighbor’s home.

I remember barely swimming in adolescence,
worrying all the time
about whether Mikey was going to stab me
because I touched his dad’s Amazing Spider-Man #2
and my fingers had acid on them, I was told at least.

The things touched are often forgotten
in the tongue, I can’t remember the face
or the sound of the girl I once held hands with
in first grade, I want to say her name was Kimberly Laserbeam
but that can’t be right.
Something_Vague
Blanched in White Oars
Join date: Nov 2004
5,239 IQ
#3
waiting for my dickass friends to read the shit, same goes for my editor/publisher.

wanna read it? send me your e-mail.
smartalecG94
Just my Bronze showing
Join date: Feb 2011
183 IQ
#5
The first two lines confused the hell out of me, to be completely honest. I didnt really feel that they connected with the rest, which was fantastic by the way. And if that offer is open to anyone, my email is smartalecg@hotmail.com
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Something_Vague
Blanched in White Oars
Join date: Nov 2004
5,239 IQ
#7
sent novels to all, formatting issues aplenty, point them out if you want, don't really care. just enjoy it and read and let me know what you thought.
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Join date: Apr 2011
1,459 IQ
#10
wow if i were an e-mail spambot this thread would be fairly exciting. tip: when you're telling someone your e-mail address on a forum you're supposed to be like "johndoe AT website DOT com".
Something_Vague
Blanched in White Oars
Join date: Nov 2004
5,239 IQ
#11
Quote by Cyclones41
Jesus I love your writing. This is really, really solid work man. (P.S. Your novel is really good so far, too!)


Thanks! Send me your thoughts through out reading it, I'd love to hear updates.
seventh_angel
So-Called New-Age(d) Poet
Join date: Aug 2007
3,144 IQ
#12
I can't quite reach that first stanza, but the rest of this piece was really good. I'd read your novel but I've had barely any free time, and I don't think I'd give it the attention I believe it deserves. I may ask you for it or maybe just buy it in a couple of months.