#1
Hey guys - I'd appreciate any feedback you can give on my song "Straight from a Movie." C4C, as usual.

Link here: https://soundcloud.com/therudycometh/straight-from-a-movie

Yes, I know the lyrics are kind of cheesy, but hey, it's a girl-pleaser. :P


... Kind of like that Heineken commercial:
"You like Peter Cetera?"
"No, but they do. Yeah, the ladies love Cetera. And if you love the ladies, by default, you love Cetera."
"So... I love Peter Cetera?"
-Rudy

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Last edited by therudycometh at Dec 31, 2012,
#2
I like it a lot.

The first riff, where it goes an octave up, is out slightly, it's like there's a gap after the chord finishes compared to the lower one where there isn't. I could be wrong but I noticed it right away and listened to it a few times.

I'm not sure if the vocals are completely in time. It's only slight but I noticed it at 0:51 when you come in and 0:58 where you try and share 2 words with a beat. Have a listen. Plus they need to be louder, I can hardly understand them. Just remix it louder.

Whoever's voice it is, it sounds good, and the guitar is really good. Really fat tone.

The main thing I'm definite about is the vocals do need to be louder.
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#3
I think because you perceive lack of vocal talent you are burying the vocals in the mix. Leaves the song feeling a little weak. Perhaps double track the vocals and treat one set heavily and use the clean track to provide the cut through so we can catch the lyrics. (Just a suggestion - but at least crank the vocs up)

The guitar riff is nice...

Please listen to mine - I can't seem to get a review - good or bad!

Keep rockin' and don't be vocal shy!

DWS


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#4
Mephaphil - This was just a rough recording, so that probably accounts for the inconsistencies. The vocals and guitar are both mine - I'm definitely an instrumentalist before a vocalist - so maybe you're right about the vocals being too quiet. I don't like to listen to myself sing haha.

DancesWithSheep - You too with the vocals! Yeah, they're my vocals, I'm just not a fan of them. It's right at the top of my range, and I feel like I'm straining to hit some notes, which I guess is why I double tracked the vocals in the first place... makes them sound less miserable. And sure, I'll go give yours a listen right now!

Thanks guys!
-Rudy

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#6
Demian1695 - Thanks! Guess I have some vocal work to do. I'll go do yours now!
-Rudy

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#7
A little late of a C4C, but I got around to it

Sounds pretty good, like something from the 70's and 80's (aka awesome). The riff is great and memorable.

The mix can take a little work, but assuming it's a demo, the musicality is nice, and I can easily see the finished product as really catchy. Something I'd personally probably listen to on a regular basis (this is the type of music I'm into). Otherwise, I don't know what to say aside from keep up the good work