jaybearch
Registered User
Join date: Jan 2013
133 IQ
#1
We lived in a space between now and then
held in tenderness of when

if
feeling left alone
with grace of God
embraced your bones

times won’t hold the wills of if
not when it takes your soul and binds your pith

you lost me to if
(when)

Now couldn’t hold you
and
Sooner became an uncrossable sea.
Last edited by jaybearch at Jan 28, 2013,
the bartender
UG's biology teacher
Join date: Nov 2009
429 IQ
#2
Amazing. Very well done.

If I had to criticise something, it would be the line "not when it takes your soul and binds your pith". I somehow get stuck on that one every time I read it.
You who build these altars now

To sacrifice these children
You must not do it anymore