#5
Cool idea with the palm muted intro cleans....could be a bit clearer though, unless that was your intent to make it sound like that? This comes to mind, from 00:45
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=C7oH6Ku27Us

The bit's that sound like synth work well, the clicky cleans move into those well. Second batch of palm muted cleans sound a lot better.
The lead ideas sound good, but kinda one dimensional in the tone. Add more verb, delay, and double/quad track the lot. Should sound amazing once that is done.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PBAOxAjJoKA

This, from 10:00 onwards.

Aside from this, really no criticism.
#6
ty GS
"its not the destination.... so much as the journey" one once said