#1
http://dl.dropbox.com/u/3782733/NewMetalSong1.mp3

So this is a complete bare-bones demo track that isn't even finished for what is going to be the fastest track I've ever recorded. It's more punky/metally than most things I do, but I'm really looking forward to trying to lay down vocals for this.

What do you guys think of it? I'm really not very experienced with this kind of thrashy/punkish style.

C4C, of course.
#2
Try using a wider variety of drum patterns. For example, in the chorus (or whatever the part with all the ringing chords will be), instead of off-beat, you could switch the snare to on every quarter note. And for the parts with the snare off-beat, it'll help if you keep time on the cymbal/hat in eighth notes, instead of quarters. You could also look into blast beats, but I'm not sure that would fit. Otherwise, not bad at all.
#3
CoreysMonster,
Guitar has rather high frequencies, but I am sensitive to that. Guitar riffs are good. I agree the main drum beat is fairly repetitive. I myself, am not fond of blast beats, but that is purely a personal preference. It does feel like it needs vocals. Sounds good overall so far. Please review my music at this link:

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1596744