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A heart, sir, a heart is what I need.
Where are you, inevitable lover?
Are you in a predicament
waiting for a shining-armoured knight?
You long for the freedom of the seas
yet cling to the scrub-land,
your tether to the world.
Let go, good hope is there for a reason.
Let me harbour your tears,
your triumphs and your agonies.
Allow me to venture into wildernesses
longing for the trail back to our home.
Good God, loneliness.
Good God.
#2
So after reading a couple of your works I would like to say I very much enjoy your style and flow of writing. It seems to all fit together just fine
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#3
I wanted so dearly to like this.

It has this gravitas (that I generally feel your poetry has) that is classic. I always imagine your poetry being read by some deep-voiced godly-man while he looks over a stormy sea or something. BUT, I just felt like there wasn't enough content here. There were 14 lines, but I felt like you only said 3 or 5 lines worth of important information. It read well, it had a nice flow down the page, but when I finished I felt like you could have summed it all up with,

"Where are you, inevitable lover?
Good god, the loneliness."

and I wouldn't have missed too much. Hopefully I can go back to worshipping the ground you walk upon for your next piece.

I'd appreciate if you could give me your thoughts on, "Envelopes" in my sig.

Cheers,
Zach