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Megan, Megan,
Such a rush, My first crush,
Megan, Megan,
A dream come true, A nightmare, too.

Let her break me, Make me crawl,
My jealousy, A wrecking ball,
I fell hard for, A living doll,
and I fall, and I fall, and I fall.

Jenny, Jenny,
Had some kicks, with a hippie chick.
Jenny, Jenny,
Oh so nice, But I needed spice.

She was safe, I wanted danger,
She was a friend when I wanted a stranger,
She took flight, as I stalled,
And I fall, and I fall and I fall.

Leslie, Leslie,
Such a surprise, didn't see her disguise,
Leslie, Leslie,
I opened my heard, but she was playing a part.

She was an actor, our life was a stage,
I forgot my lines, and got her rage,
Nothing to do at the curtain call,
Except fall, and I fall, and I fall.

Leslie, Leslie,
What is real, can you fake what you feel?
Leslie, Leslie,
Despite our past, this love can last.

Halloween night, the costume ball,
We had a kiss, that started it all,
Before the winter of our discontent,
We had Fall, fell in love, in the Fall.

(end)
Have chord progression / melodic line written out for it, too, but my voice isn't so good for singing (at least not yet, trying to improve), so don't know when I'll be able to put together what I consider a decent sound clip of it.

Ken
Last edited by krm27 at Apr 16, 2013,
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Leslie, Leslie,
Such a surprise, didn't see her disguise,
Leslie, Leslie,
I opened my heart, but she was playing a part.

Leslie, Leslie,
What is real, can you fake what you feel?
Leslie, Leslie,
Despite our past, this love can last.
I think it would be best to to name this person something else so you don't have the same name twice

So I this piece wasn't bad, but it's not something that I would really saw left me inspired. It all felt cliche in a way but it still has an interesting feel. So maybe with the right music this could be good, but the lyrics alone won't make it top of the charts.
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Ken,

i really like the concept of this song. the explanations of why each relationship didn't work and the whole timeline thing.

i personal think it rhymes a bit too much but that's probably just me.

was this song inspired by your own personal life or is it a fictitious piece?

feel free to let me know when you get a "decent sound clip" of it.

thanks for sharing.
I just want to know that I did all I could with what I was given.
Last edited by mr.retard at Apr 19, 2013,