The guitars are pretty good, it would be interesting to see where the song went. The drums could do a bit more though, and as for the mix there seems to be a lot of distorted noise burying the starting riff. I get the idea behind that but I think it should be toned down a bit. Overall nice job, fancy giving something here a listen? https://soundcloud.com/the-empty-twist
Quite liked it, reminds me of a progression I wrote awhile back.
Otherwise, basically what the guy above me said.

But would like to hear a finished version of that
care to look at that, again only clips
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