Audio quality could be better (not sure if you just mic'ed the output of your computer speakers, or just video-taped your computer, or ?). Kind of interesting effect at 2:00 & elsewhere. Yes, some good vocals could help. Songwriting for this instrumental is pleasant. Not sure if the birds are intentional or unintentional background noise. Playing is fine. Are you currently in Iraq or CA? Please review my music at this link:

Last edited by aaron aardvark at May 14, 2013,
haha yes its very amateur, the bird noises are unintentional, ive never been to Iraq but i'd like to go. The audio quality should be amazing but i think everything is too loud so maybe turn down your speakers or computer volume thats my bad, i will fix it on the next video. I wil definintely review your link thanks for the feedback.