#1
some friends,
I try not to talk to much about
the future with.
they squirm
and change the subject to
another matter
with no matter.
the future is all
we have.
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i'm just a litte too shallow to consider
that maybe i've been a little more eager
each day to wake up and take a shower
brush my teeth and smile for the mirror
#2
Looks like you've got an idea there you gotta elaborate on.
"Hey, where will we be...our parents...the country...our family/relationships...in 5 years/6 months/next week?"
And no one seems to care. It's all about next weekend. It's all about how they can burn as much of their life away on cheap thrills as fast as they can.
I'm liking this. If you don't write something about it, maybe I will.
"So they try to change
to another matter
With no matter at all...
The future is all we have
But they still can't hear it's call"
#3
you could probably just end this at "they squirm". however, if you're trying to cinch this with the "no matter" line, I'd consider re-working the first bit of the poem. the change in tone from the first half to the second half is affronting in such a small space of words - the first conversational, exemplifying the things not said with its own form, the second much more broad and reflective in its tone but also more direct.
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