Awesome! I would like to hear a longer version with more riffs and a solo or two!
Nice intro, Good guitar tone, Nice snare.
Bass drum needs more volume, punch, and low end.
Cymbals need some high cut. Also i suggest panning the crash cymbals wider.
At the break, try panning the guitar right and the high hat left.
The outro should fade out instead of being cutted.

Please check out my demo:
Thorium, thanks for checking bro ... unfortunately i don play leads (rather i'd say i cant) ... i'll keep ur suggestions in my mind nd try to rearrange the mixing as u suggest .... will post here when i'm done