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It's been an incredibly long time since I've posted here, so long that I've forgotten my original username and password, but I'm coming back for nostalgia's sake and maybe some feedback.

Skip the story, here are some lyrics from my newest project:

F*ck The Lannisters (Fantasy Fades)

And I watched you draw a line in sand, now the tide is coming in.
It's washing through your desperate hands.
And I know I've heard you speak the words, as if you believed yourself.
(And I know you can't keep a secret, the blisters on my tongue show though my teeth.)
But I see, you smile through your teeth.

You wave your hands through the flames.
You'll break at the bend.
Your fantasy fades.

In the end.

It's the space between the words that scares me the worst.
You crossed your 'i's and lost your place.
And I know I've heard you speak the words, every careful syllable.
(And I know you can't keep a secret, the blisters on my tongue show though my teeth.)
But I see, you smile through your teeth.

You wave your hands through the flames.
You'll break at the bend.
Your fantasy fades.

In the end.

It's burning down.
I'm walking out.
It's burning down.
It's burning down.

You wave your hands through the flames.
You'll break at the bend.
Your fantasy fades.

In the end.


Critiques are welcome.

There's no better way to improve than to be told what you are doing wrong.

If these words intrigue you at all, the song (and others like it) can be found here:

"soundcloud.com/oceans-to-athena/f uck-the-lannisters-mp3"
(remove space)
Last edited by morganjones at Jun 3, 2013,