Quote by untunedguitars
You have a good voice. Keyboards is a little bit louder and the notes don't blend together well with the song. The chorus is good but the verse melody is kind of mediocre. But I think the song has potential with some polishing.

Keyboards? It's tremolo picked guitar with loads of reverb and tremelo on. Can see how it sounds like a synthy/keyboard though.

Thanks for the crit! I can agree on the first few bars on the verses, although I was aiming for simplicity there to build up the verse.