#1
As the title says, this is the first song I've ever written. I feel like there are a few parts which don't transition too well though. Critique please
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Bored.gp5
Last edited by Lordsam247 at Jun 28, 2013,
#2
So...
Bars 1-42 were AWESOME, when the electric guitars kicked in it became really epic!
43-58 are OK, but you'd better add a transition between bars 42 and 43. It changes very suddenly. It's like the song was fast and furious, but then crushed into something and almost stopped.
59-68 are meh, these power chords sound boring compared to the epic intro.
68-80 - nice solo, fits the intro and the verse (?) nicely.
88-104 again it changes all of a sudden and not in a good way. Kinda chaotic riff.
Then again a riff the same as in 59-68.
112-129 cool solo, which ends the song nicely.

If you work on the song, it'll be really good! It has a nice epic feeling at half of the parts which I adore.
#3
Came up with a new riff to transition from 42-43. Changed 59-68. Replaced 88-104 with the new riffs from 59-68 and the 42-43 transition. Tell me what you think!
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Bored v1.1.gp5
#4
Much, much better! Is it really your first song?! It's really epic! My only complaint now is that you could make it longer, you know, to make the epicness longer!