#2
Right now this sounds like a bunch of riffs thrown together. It doesn't really have that good flow. Try to make the part changes smoother.

Also, your guitar is a bit out of tune, especially in the clean part. You could improve your guitar sound, it sounds a bit noisy. Maybe use less distortion. Drums are a bit too quiet (or guitar is too loud).

It needs a lot of work to make it sound like a good song. So work on it. You need to make the part changes sound a lot smoother. Now it doesn't really even sound like a song because of the lack of flow - it's more like a collection of ideas.
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