#1
Okay this song was made for my ex who was also my best friend. He turned against me and the rest is a long story. I didn't sugarcoat shit it these lyrics so bear with me.

I'm Over It:

You don't seem to have noticed
What I want isn't your kiss.
For a fact, if I left,
I know I wouldn't be missed
All I want is you to notice me.
It's not like I'm not in your presence.
You think I'm heartless.
While at that, you don't make sense.
I'm on the edge.
Ready to jump.
I'm on the edge.
I know you won't catch me at the bottom.
So I've made up my mind.
I need my own time.
For myself..
And it's time to walk away.
Isolate you for days.
And if you come back
I guarantee you I'll leave.
Just in case you don't know,
You should start by knowing me.
You say you're afraid
Of the storm headed this way.
But while I try hiding the clouds,
All you do is bring rain.
You say you're so sorry
Then say that you hate me.
You tell me you're guilty.
Then say I'm a waste.
I'm on the edge.
Ready to jump.
I'm on the edge.
I know you won't catch me at the bottom.
So I've made up my mind.
I need my own time.
For myself..
And it's time to walk away.
Isolate you for days.
And if you come back
I guarantee you I'll leave.
Just in case you don't know,
You should start by knowing me.
You're confused like mom.
So abusive like dad.
You yell and and threaten me.
Then talk suicide thinking I'll feel bad.
When we argue I SCREAM!
When I hit you, you'll BLEED!
When you neglect me, I NEED!
But now when I leave you alone, I'll breathe.
When I call you
It's like your kindness is over.
When I see you
It's like dusting dirt off your shoulder.
Then you sit there and
act like it's all my fault.
Are you mentally challenged?
All of our fights are YOUR fault.
You need to get your head straight.
Take some medication pills.
Your brain is doing double takes.
Control yourself before I strike the nerve to kill.
I've jumped off the edge.
Jumped so far.
I grew my wings
And I'll be gone by tomorrow.
So I've made up my mind.
I need my own time.
For myself..
And it's time to walk away.
Isolate you for days.
And if you come back
I guarantee you I'll leave.
Just in case you don't know,
You should start by knowing me.
You never knew me.
You think you do.
This isn't a movie.
This is the reality of you.

-Brooklyn Razorblades

Damn. xD
Love is like a friendship caught on fire. In the beginning a flame, very pretty, often hot and fierce, but still only light and flickering.
#2
It'd be nice if you could organize the sections of the song into verses, choruses, bridges etc. to make the lyrics look more like a song rather than a long text. The impression you get when it look more structured can be quite different.

More on-topic:
The lyrics sound like as if you went straight for a pen and paper to write down your feelings after the breakup. The word "you" is absolutely everywhere and in this part:
"Are you mentally challenged?
All of our fights are YOUR fault.
You need to get your head straight.
Take some medication pills.
Your brain is doing double takes.
Control yourself before I strike the nerve to kill."

I can't help but laugh.
...Sorry, but I'm being honest.

I belive James Scott has an excellent article (here at UG, actually) on the songwriting subject which I recommend you to take a look at. Good read.