ryan.bollinger.
Registered User
Join date: Apr 2013
10 IQ
#1
Until the end
We do not mend
The pain that life does send

You can't hide
Or subside
No more time to bide

Take it now
Or take it never
Say goodbye forever

Ever clever
This last endeavor
As your ties now do sever
21wickwing
wick2107
Join date: Feb 2009
70 IQ
#2
Everything here feels like it is forced into its structure. I think you should just write everything down and then compress it. Structure is still something I struggle with. However, it comes with practice. You will get it down eventually! Keep On Writing