Join date: Feb 2009
1,487 IQ
Focal points focus on fantasy and flowing fair beauty, alike.
Hair heightens in haste as the pen prances across the paper.
No man, no woman, nor child traces from the trance
too true to tame the wild beast.

The emotion entitled “flow” by positive psychologists and
my mild-mannered mentor, whom encourages
embracement of the excitement the sacred
flow so softly secretes, seizes me.

(I'll get to critiquing more poems on here today/tomorrow)
Registered User
Join date: Apr 2006
7,150 IQ
the alliteration is on veritable overload. i think it loses the forest of the trees here.