I think it would work a lot better with vocals. I actually imagine it with some kind of Nightwish type of vocalist singing over it.
Much thanks for listening katalyzt13 and EpiExplorer! It was definitely written with vocals in mind, but right after I finished it the potential vocalist bailed. I was totally going for a Delain (or perhaps Nightwish) style of vocals, just powerful female vocals. That would be awesome. But will likely never happen. lol.