#1
Hi guys, so over the last 40 hours or so, Ive written and recorded this song. It was a challenge for me because i decided to try and add some different time sigs in that im not use to using. I think the results are pretty good. I love my guitar solo in it, id love to hear what u guys think! Any crit/feedback/advice/hate(jk) will be appreciated greatly!

http://soundcloud.com/awesomo41894/being-as-a-safari-original

As always, Ill C4C,


Thanks a lot,

Jake P
#2
Jake,
The beginning is pretty abrupt, I'd have a bit more of a build up. The guitar riffs are good. Playing is tight. Audio quality is pretty good, though I think you usually do a bit better if my memory serves me. The harmony lead guitars are nice (I was never good at that when playing half way fast). The lead guitar around 3:00 is nice. At times, this has a bit of a prog feel (like Rush or something), which is fine by me. Older Rush classics are some of my favorite. Please review my music at this link:

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1617055
#3
Hey Jake,

First of all, is this supposed to be "Constant Motion" by Dream Theater? :P or just heavily influenced

The riffs are good and I like the chorus at 1:30. However, the intro is a bit weird and sudden. Good use of synths throughout, keeps it heavy which is nice. The solo is good but it could be better if it was made to be more continuous and fluid. Decent recording quality though with the gear you have

C4C? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1618478
#4
Quote by TheProgWay
Hey Jake,

First of all, is this supposed to be "Constant Motion" by Dream Theater? :P or just heavily influenced

The riffs are good and I like the chorus at 1:30. However, the intro is a bit weird and sudden. Good use of synths throughout, keeps it heavy which is nice. The solo is good but it could be better if it was made to be more continuous and fluid. Decent recording quality though with the gear you have

C4C? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1618478

haha thanks man, and i noticed that after i recorded it! haha ive never been much of a DT fan, but ig i must have had that song in my head or something idk haha.