#2
First off, great work!

Production-wise I think the intro guitar sounds a bit treble heavy but it sits well through the rest of the song. And I feel like the part from around 1:35 could use more energy/volume in terms of the instrumental backing.

The chord changes are pleasantly interesting and the vocals sound nice. I guess going back to my comment from earlier, I feel that you can get away with letting the instrumental be more dynamic because the vocals seem to call for it (at least in my opinion).

My work (please check out whichever you like):
Post-hardcore: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1622391
Titanium Cover: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1620318