#1
This has taken me a few hours and is still being changed, just looking for any comments improvements etc

I've been feeling like this for several years
Nothing seems to settle, closed doors hope dissapears
Feeding and swallowing dreams that are symbolic
Of escaping this chronic heart-ache tearing at the seems callin
Out for someone to take it all away just for a day or a while
But I gotta stand up myself
If I don't swim I'm gonna drown
Brawling with my health watching the time falling down
Ticking in my head waiting to blow now
And all I do is sit here behind a smile hoping I can be normal for a while

So when the time finally comes
Nowhere left to turn
I'll sit here and rhyme
Or I'll shrivel and burn

Why does this have to be Me?
To what degree did god think f**k it and put this target on me?
It's just my luck it's cursed dear god I swear
All these feelings I harbor wearing me down into the ground
This nightmare I'm still in
This anger, frustration leaving me hostile and tightly wound
God I'm going insane looking for a diversion
Even losing my smile... oh what a shame
I couldn't care no more nothing will be the same ever again
If I knew life was a trial I'd say f**k it why buy the full version
Last edited by ollies112 at Nov 11, 2013,
#2
Seems really good to me
just curious, what type of music would you consider putting these lyrics in? Just my personal opinion, this could sound awesome if the verses were rapped and the chorus sung normally and quite slow.
#3
Quote by mickel_w
Seems really good to me
just curious, what type of music would you consider putting these lyrics in? Just my personal opinion, this could sound awesome if the verses were rapped and the chorus sung normally and quite slow.


Cheers! yeah I was kinda thinking it to be rapped makes more sense! I'll have to work on fitting a beat to it and doing the last verse, hopefully it will be alright!