#1
This is a new Piece i wrote. It's kinda simple, because i wanted it straight up to the point. I think with the Riffs i wrote, it will sound very cool. Anyways, some critics would be nice. I can also read your stuff if you want me to


my so called friend
dont you pretend,
because we both know
this is the end

i'll watch you go
you'll never know
you're just a memory
of the man i used to be

for the sake of all the mistakes you made
for the sake of all these things you said
for the sake of all the nights, i drank myself to sleep

this is a farewell i should have said so much earlier
i sacrifice you to get me out of this tragedy

so much selfishness in your eyes
you're the demon I must exorcise
too long i wasted myself on you
this is the only thing i can do

i'll walk away
and you will stay
it hurts today
but we're better off this way

for the sake of all the mistakes you made
for the sake of all these things you said
for the sake of all the nights, i drank myself to sleep

this is a farewell i should have said so much earlier
i sacrifice you to get me out of this tragedy
#2
i like the "straight up to the point" style and the subject matter of this piece. i like how you ended it with the last two lines. i'm not too sure if i'm into the title but that's just my opinion. thanks for sharing.

i know this wasn't much of a critique but if you want you can critique mine.here's the link.
I just want to know that I did all I could with what I was given.