#1
I asked Matthew
if it was wrong
to write a song
about someone.
He responded*
no not at all

I tried explaining
I said it feels like
I"m using people
for personal gain

Matthew told me
that everyone
writes songs about
people they know
and I told him
I do not care

I tried explaining
I said it feels like
I'm using people
for personal gain


have a listen

* i accidentally said "and he told me" instead of "he responded".
I just want to know that I did all I could with what I was given.
#2
This is one hell of a vague imagery.The problem with this piece is that you are trying to tell a story which is full of personal bond and expectations but nowhere in the piece I can come across the typical relationship that you guys have and nor I can tell about the circumstances that this piece relates to.

Anyone can write a song about anone ...whole rock and roll got build on that but it's the message and emotion that makes it worthwile
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