#1
Basically something I wrote because of how I am a bit of an introvert and see things in a different light than a lot of my friends. So the verses are ideas that I've thought about, and the choruses would be the other people telling me how I'm pessimistic/cynical/etc but I retort with saying i'm just realistic... hence the name of the song :O

You can listen to the song with the vocals here as well - http://www.reverbnation.com/blackscreen/song/19191132-realistic-w-vocal-idea-in-progress

Beyond the silence of Jupiter's Moons
Our home looks so small, aloof
All that you've known, and all that you have seen
This planet holds all that has ever been

You're miserable
Much too literal
Cynical
No, I'm realistic

You're critical
Morbid, half full
Pitiful
No, I'm realistic

Late in the night, under the starlight
We all ask why, we live just to die
Trapped in a box with unreachable locks
Questions implored, we chose to ignore

You're miserable
Much too literal
Cynical
No, I’m realistic

You're critical
Morbid, half full
Pitiful
No, I'm realistic

Find inner peace, for all things will cease
Iron to rust, Proud men to dust
Be yourself and no one else
Go towards the dawn, we'll still carry on

You're miserable
Much too literal
Cynical
No, I’m realistic

You're critical
Morbid, half full
Pitiful
No, I'm realistic
#2
All I can really say is that your rhymes seem pretty forced, and that the way you structured your sentences showed that. You formed them in a really odd way to facilitate the rhymes, which throws off the natural conversational pattern lyrics like them tend to go for.
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