#1
Mirrors lie,
so I rely on
portraits.

They seem to
capture you,
true and tragic.
Thou lines tell
otherwise.

Do you mind our obscurity?
Do you mind, a mind, portrayed
displayed in waves?

Speak but
not orally,
really loud.
Cloud changes mood.
Blurry yet
easy to read.

Do you mind our obscurity?
Do you mind, a mind, portrayed
displayed in waves?

There is, too much, to see.

Eyes closed and
minds eye blind.
All outlets
sweats images.
Great mass
of mess.

Too much, to see.
Too much, to see.
Empty tankard! Empty Tankard!
#2
This seems like an experiment in sounds, you use assonance/internal rhyme well, I just yearn for a bit more direction. Am I right in thinking that's not necessarily what you're going for? I think if this is meant to be radiohead-esque delivery lyrics it could work great though.