#1
I have been many hours mixing this song, i need an honest opinion about the MIX and if you want about the song...

https://soundcloud.com/franciscofuenzalida/falsas-salidashttps://soundcloud.com/franciscofuenzalida/falsas-salidas

It's on spanish, i'm gonna try to put the translation here and then the lyrics on spanish:


English Lyrics
Why i want to go out
If always i do the same things
I'm not gonna sleep
To be fallen again in the same rocks

Why i want to go out
If i don't want to conquer anyone
I'm fine the way i am
Denying myself in rooms that are going to search
They will watch
Test me
Analyze me
And they will not see
the disease
The distraction
The loneliness


Why I should sleep
if when I wake up I feel weak
And what am I doing here
Singing crap that nobody will ever hear
no one will sing
No one will forget me
Because no one will listen me

Bridge

If I chose this life
why it's so hard to say it
The choice was very narcisistic
Nothing was good for me

And the fear of the forbidden
The fear of getting out of hear
THE fear of fears grew giant walls in front of me.

.....

Why I want to go
If I can not conquer anyone


Spanish Lyrics
Pa' que quiero salir
Si siempre hago las mismas cosas
No voy a dormir
y estar botado denuevo en las rocas

Pa' que debo salir
Si no quiero conquistar a nadie
Estoy bien así
Negándome en piezas que buscarán
me observarán
me harán pruebas
me analizarán
y no verán
la enfermedad
la distracción
la soledad.

Pa' que debo dormir
si cuando despierto me siento débil
Y que hago yo aquí
Cantando huevadas que nadie nunca oirá
Nadie cantará
Nadie me olvidara
Porque nadie lo escuchará

Si yo elegí esta vida
porque cuanto tanto decir
La elección fue bien narcisa
Nada era bueno para mi

Y el temor a lo prohibido
El temor salir de aquí
EL miedo de los miedos creció murallas gigantes frente a mi.

.....

Pa' que quiero salir
Si no puedo conquistar a nadie
Since 2002 using UG. This page teached me how to play guitar and help'd me to embrace the passion of my life: Music.
Last edited by tiky at Dec 21, 2013,
#2
I like the rising action, like the repeated riffs but with added intensity or added instruments added every few turns.

I think there would be room for more percussions, maybe a light percussion at the start, turning into a full on rock drum at the end when it gets heavier.

Your guitar playing is good over all but between 3.20 and 3.35 there is a clean guitar a little loud that sounds off. The rest of the guitars blend very well together but that one sounds weird.

Also I think you could end on bang. Maybe a big loud dissonant chord right after it gets quiet or some sort of cymbal hit.

It's overall very good though. The guitars are dominant but I'm assuming you did that on purpose.


Thank you for reviewing my band's video:
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1627338
#3
tiky,
I only know about 100 words in Spanish, so I can't comment on the lyrics in Spanish. Around 1:18 (and other places), somehow the melodies sound like they are clashing. Singing is OK overall, though pitchy at times. The audio quality is good. I like some of the guitar & keyboard riffs. Keep at it! Please review my music at this link:

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1627184
#4
Wow man, you totally nailed it. I'm not a drummer so i had to program all the thing with my midi controller. My idea is in fact to go into "full on rock drum" from 2:55 to the end.

The truth is the guitar at 3.20- 3.35 is "slightly" out of beat (i knew that something was "wrong" there but now i was able to indetify what was it), and i agree with you that is a bit loud. I'm gonna put a compressor on that part or re-record it.

The thing is i like to do full takes of every instrument improvising when i'm recording and i don't remember even the chords of the song, too lazy to relearn the song

Thank you very much

Abut the end, it has to end like that because after it goes with this song that is not fully finished but keeps the same sad vibe

https://soundcloud.com/franciscofuenzalida/sesamo


Quote by flexiblemile
I like the rising action, like the repeated riffs but with added intensity or added instruments added every few turns.

I think there would be room for more percussions, maybe a light percussion at the start, turning into a full on rock drum at the end when it gets heavier.

Your guitar playing is good over all but between 3.20 and 3.35 there is a clean guitar a little loud that sounds off. The rest of the guitars blend very well together but that one sounds weird.

Also I think you could end on bang. Maybe a big loud dissonant chord right after it gets quiet or some sort of cymbal hit.

It's overall very good though. The guitars are dominant but I'm assuming you did that on purpose.


Thank you for reviewing my band's video:
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1627338
Since 2002 using UG. This page teached me how to play guitar and help'd me to embrace the passion of my life: Music.
Last edited by tiky at Dec 21, 2013,