#1
take my hand, another place I go
understand, your not the one who stole
know whats right, no-one left to fight
leave me now, just know that I'm still alive

I'm still alive

leave me please, and know that I'm still alive!
take this chance to feel, your sacrifice!
before you go, just know your not alone
for you, I'll never truly go

I see myself, and don't know who I am
speak to me, and let me understand
I know I'm not, the man I used to be.
I move on in life, and know I'm still alive

I'm still alive

just be free, and know that I'm still alive!
take your stance for thee, to decide your life
just before I go, I know I'll never be alone
for me, you'll never truly go

leave me please, and know that I'm still alive!
take this chance to feel, your sacrifice!
before you go, just know your not alone
for you, I'll never truly go


what do you think?
#2
The best way to overcome some of the growing pains of writing and becoming a good one faster is to gain a lot of breadth. Increase your library. Read about songwriters and poets, read their stuff. Find a style you resonate with and then write with a specific goal or voice in mind.

This was as good as anyone's first lyrics. Keep writing, have a goal.
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