#1
concept: i thought of a verse about the sandman, so i looked up the sandman, and in folklore he's a dude that would give kids good dreams. So basically i thought: No sandman = vivid and dangerous nightmares! then at the end the child awakens from his sleep.


there goes the sandman,
he comes in the night
but don't you worry
he does not bite

he foresees the things
you most desire
a life misguided
a trial by fire

here lies sandman
sleeping in the ground
will we ever see him
or will he ever be found
here lies sandman!

the child sleeps
but will he wake tomorrow
with lucid minds
evil thoughts bring me sorrow

he knows the path
which cannot be followed
with dreams receding
there comes no tomorrow

here lies sandman
sleeping in the ground
will we ever see him
or will he ever be found
here lies sandman!

the hours elapse
with a crack in the glass
use your time wisely
dont think so fast

the time is now
to take his offer
don't run and hide
your time is over
awaken.
Last edited by TzFlynn at Jan 21, 2014,
#4
Quote by TzFlynn
concept: i thought of a verse about the sandman, so i looked up the sandman, and in folklore he's a dude that would give kids good dreams. So basically i thought: No sandman = vivid and dangerous nightmares! then at the end the child awakens from his sleep.


there goes the sandman,
he comes in the night
but don't you worry
he doesn't bite

he foresees the things
which you most desire
a life that's misguided
a trial by fire

here lies the sandman
he sleeps in the ground
will we ever see him
will he ever be found
here lies the sandman!

the child sleeps
but will he wake tomorrow
with lucid minds
evil thoughts bring me sorrow

he knows the path
which cannot be followed
with dreams receding
there comes no tomorrow

here lies the sandman
he sleeps in the ground
will we ever see him
will he ever be found
here lies the sandman!

the hours elapse
with a crack in the glass
use your time wisely
dont think so fast

the time is now
to take his offer
don't run and hide
your time is over
awaken.


This is my first time doing this, so sorry if I missed the point. I changed a few bits to make it flow a bit better (in my mind.) Other than that, I like the idea and the story, maybe the first two lines of the last verse are a bit odd to me, and I'd maybe try to change the "will we ever see him, will he ever be found" a bit, to get it to flow better, but other than that it's an interesting song!