#1
Hi

This is pretty much my first post here so please tell me if im doing something wrong or breaking any rules

Anyway i pretty much want to share a song i wrote for my band and especially the sweep picking solos i did as i am heavily influenced by Jason becker and Guthrie govan.

Please comment and tell me what you think, if you have a track i will do it for you aswell

you can find the track on my page or on youtube here:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Vjw15eSafXE

I also challenge you people to dare and play it

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#2
I can hear quite a bit of Serrana arpeggios there. Couldn't catch that much of Guthrie but I do not trust my ear is that developed anyways :P
Though I do not listen to that much of this genre, in my humble opinion it's a good song. Best of luck!
#3
Quote by xinou
Hi

This is pretty much my first post here so please tell me if im doing something wrong or breaking any rules

Anyway i pretty much want to share a song i wrote for my band and especially the sweep picking solos i did as i am heavily influenced by Jason becker and Guthrie govan.

Please comment and tell me what you think, if you have a track i will do it for you aswell

you can find the track on my page or on youtube here:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Vjw15eSafXE

I also challenge you people to dare and play it

Offtopic advertising: also like us on facebook

https://www.facebook.com/AbandonedWorld

// Samuel Talebi from Abandoned World

At least give us the tab... to much chugging, needs more fretwork on the rhythm guitar
#4
The guitar work is very stripped down and meanders around basic rhythmic ideas that don't seem to ever go anywhere. The leads seem chucked in for the sake of adding a rush of technical skill within the song, unnecessary given the rest of the guitar work.

Are the drums programmed? They lack any real feeling and just seem to provide a backdrop for the guitars. The vocals are decent, but extremely bland.

I would suggest putting less emphasis on chugging rhythms and make more creative drumbeats. This whole piece came off as more of a calculated exercise than a song.
#5
Quote by Morphogenesis26
The guitar work is very stripped down and meanders around basic rhythmic ideas that don't seem to ever go anywhere. The leads seem chucked in for the sake of adding a rush of technical skill within the song, unnecessary given the rest of the guitar work.

Are the drums programmed? They lack any real feeling and just seem to provide a backdrop for the guitars. The vocals are decent, but extremely bland.

I would suggest putting less emphasis on chugging rhythms and make more creative drumbeats. This whole piece came off as more of a calculated exercise than a song.


Thanks for the critique but yyeah the chugging is kinda of the style of the music, this music style doesnt involve intro verse chorus solo chorus type of writing and its built for a crazy live show. Also this song is only a teaser of what we can do before we release some more structured songs!

But thanks for the critique you opened my eyes a bit
#6
Quote by Racaycah
I can hear quite a bit of Serrana arpeggios there. Couldn't catch that much of Guthrie but I do not trust my ear is that developed anyways :P
Though I do not listen to that much of this genre, in my humble opinion it's a good song. Best of luck!


haha i am just a huge fan of guthrie so i had to mention his name, but yeah this music might not be so much "guthrie" haha

Thanks though!