#1
This is something i drilled up in 15 minutes last night, I've never really shown any strangers anything i've written before, so i'm quite curious to see what you guys have to say, good OR bad!
"Ghosts of Silence"

You Cry
we bleed,
we were never meant to see
they took, away, birth's given right of anarchy
make you believe, i assure you things aren't what they seem
they claim, to pay,
but all they do is take away

Like souls past and left to come, we are left adrift at sea,
like ghosts formed out of silence, tall tails of right and justice
voices of a new religion desecrate our lives

these words i've screamed so ****ing long,
engraved and torn inside my throat,
into the dirt i will collapse,
into this sea of hell i spat,
a broken tongue for a sinner's prayer.


Like souls past and left to come, we are left adrift at sea,
like ghosts formed out of silence, tall tails of right and justice
voices of an inner silence brings us to a hold,
darkness desends on this the age of broken homes
Solo


we were never meant to see,
We were never meant to know
that the system's dead stone cold,
pulseless, raped and left for luck,
but still nobody gives a ****

You Cry
we bleed,
we were never meant to see
they took, away, birth's given right of anarchy
make you believe, i assure you things aren't what they seem
they claim, to pay,
But all they've done is take away.
wut.
#2
This is really good, especially for something that took you 15 minutes to write
#3
Quote by Aoh legend
This is really good, especially for something that took you 15 minutes to write


20-25mins of actually putting my head down and trying to make it all fit, I'm really glad you liked it enough to leave me a comment! Thank you.
wut.
#4
Quote by Reptilianriff
20-25mins of actually putting my head down and trying to make it all fit, I'm really glad you liked it enough to leave me a comment! Thank you.

You're welcome! As a beginning songwriter it takes me an hour come up with a verse, haha. That's why I pointed it out.