#1
Hope you guys like this, I showed several of my close friends and family and they loved it, but they don't share the music making/producing hobby I do, Im fairly new at using pro tools, but im always learning something new, id love some feedback on this, and id love to check out some of your guy's original recordings!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1NnfXBrKiD0&feature=c4-overview&list=UUfKecjEvcvwaS0OTmCkiIIA
#2
The song as a whole would have more space for vocals if you had the guitar in the left/right channels and not dead center the entire time. Love the keys; adds a nice texture. My above crit goes for the electric guitar too. Open up room in the song to breathe. Very simple, but beautiful melody throughout the entire track. The electric guitar is very 'clumpy' if you get what I mean. When 3:24 hit, it grabbed my attention immensely. Very nice phrase there. The phrase afterward is a nice play off the last. Guitars could be much tighter, but they do sound nice.

Maybe add a second guitar in most of the song. If you could provide a complimentary melody to the main guitar(s), it could bring much more out of the track. Good ideas here, but they need to be polished. And the very last note should line up with that last cymbal hit. The chord there is late.

C4C?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1631744
#3
Quote by Harlot Hero
The song as a whole would have more space for vocals if you had the guitar in the left/right channels and not dead center the entire time. Love the keys; adds a nice texture. My above crit goes for the electric guitar too. Open up room in the song to breathe. Very simple, but beautiful melody throughout the entire track. The electric guitar is very 'clumpy' if you get what I mean. When 3:24 hit, it grabbed my attention immensely. Very nice phrase there. The phrase afterward is a nice play off the last. Guitars could be much tighter, but they do sound nice.

Maybe add a second guitar in most of the song. If you could provide a complimentary melody to the main guitar(s), it could bring much more out of the track. Good ideas here, but they need to be polished. And the very last note should line up with that last cymbal hit. The chord there is late.

C4C?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1631744



thank you so much for the response and Critique! San Diego eh? I grew up in Riverside man! I love southern California!

I do actually have 2 guitars layered, I put 1 guitar 28 to the left, and the other guitar 28 to the right, maybe it makes them sound centralized.

you are absolutely right about the song needing to be polished! that last note I did notice right off of the bat too!. I will work on layering and getting that last note fixed. But first I will check out your song! Thank you!
#4
Well, I don't have much time to add to what Harlot Hero said as far as production goes. It's a very simple song, not that that's bad, it's just clear that you still need a lot of experience to create something that stands out, but you have a knack for composition, and hopefully it will blossom if you keep doing it!

Hope you'll have a listen to some of our stuff: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1634912
#5
I liked it. I'm not a music theory guy by any means so i don't really have any technical critiques or anything. It passes the ear test, but as was stated earlier the part at 3:24 really grabs the attention, maybe pull a page out of the pixies/nirvana book and start with the loud bits? all in all a good song.

now I'm starting off recording so i still got to polish my skills but this is the latest thing i have done and would take all the advice you can give

http://youtu.be/LcPrSk63suM
#6
It would really benefit from vocals. Doesn't really work as an instrumental because it sounds pretty repetitive this way. At least add some melody to it, not just chords. The distorted guitar could sound better. Try panning some instruments to the left and right. I usually have bass and drums in the center and pan guitars/other instruments to the left and right.

The song had a pretty good flow and would work well with vocals. It also had dynamics which is a good thing. The part at 2:00 added some variety when the drums didn't play. Same with the part after the guitar solo at 3:48. That was really nice. The last chord is not in synch with the cymbal hit so fix that.

C4C

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1635106
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#7
Comment for comment... here is the thread on my track https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1635228


Anyways as for your song. I think as mentioned by others it could benefit from vocals. It has a very pleasant melody that could definitely be complemented by vocals. As for the mix quality some suggestions that would give it a breadth of live are things like the following (keep in mind im also new to producing so these are just some tricks I've found playing around or watching videos lately):

* Your, drums could be put in a room reverb.
*** If its a single drum track with all the drums like that, you can send a copy of the drum track to an AUX signal. Use a compressor and compress the live out of them till that second track sounds absolutely unnatural. Then put a room reverb on this and this track should sound like just the reverb without the drums. Once you blend it with the drums it will make the drums sound bigger. Doesn't work with all genres but for this it should be magical.
* Your acoustic guitar could benefit from a big blend of a nice room verb as well.
*** What software are you recording through? Logic has a nice built in verb for this for example.
* Your electric guitars could benefit from doing two takes with one on the left and one on the right. Also reverb there could add a bit of space and glue to the instruments.


For creating the illusion of a room using a reverb as suggested create an aux track with a reverb set to 100 percent. 0 Dry and 100 percent wet signal. This track is your room. Send your tracks there as needed to give the illusion of all instruments being played in a room.

You don't want too many reverbs, just one will create the room. You can use a few others to accent certain details but avoid mushing the sound.

That said, the song composition was enjoyable and it sounds clear. My suggestions are mainly to give it more width.

Once again here is my track. here is the thread on my track https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1635228

Thanks