#1
I've been wanting to do more story telling in the songs I write (much like Roger Alan Wade or James McMurtry). I've been writing and tweaking the verses for about a week and the chorus and bridge came to me last night (I finished the song after I posted this thread.) Constructive criticism?


"Another Goddamn Love Song"

A hundred some-odd miles between you and I
I known 'em like the back of my hand
Every so often you call me up drinkin'
I can't find that line in the sand

All of a sudden I find myself flyin'
Up I-95 headed north
Take the back road outta Topsfield
Find myself soon at your door

Another goddamn love song
The story of my life
Another game of do wrong
As she's fading out of sight


You ask me to take you away
We end up drivin' all night
Parked at the end of a dirt road
Talk until morning light

That one time your daddy found us
In the backseat, the windows fogged up
I tried my best to explain it
He said “Don't push your damn luck...”

Another goddamn love song
The story of my life
Another game of do wrong
As she's fading out of sight
Another goddamn love song
She may never know
I told you once, I can't run
I can't find where to go


That mornin' you could color me gone
Like the night, the wind and my mind
I ran off tired, lonely and cold
But if anyone asked, I was fine

Now I'm down to my last dollar
Hell I might just throw it away
Or I might take up smoking “coffin nails”
Lord knows I can't really say

Another goddamn love song
The story of my life
Another game of do wrong
As she's fading out of sight
Another goddamn love song
She may never know
I told you once, I can't run
I can't find where to go


Watching the sunset, I can't help but notice
The way you're not looking at me
You've turned away and I can't help but wonder
Was it something that I didn't say?
And now you're just...

Another goddamn love song
The story of my life
Another game of do wrong
As she's fading out of sight
Another goddamn love song
She may never know
I told you once, I can't run
I can't find where to go
Last edited by Mainer at Feb 20, 2014,
#2
nice, very long, maybe change the name to "story of my life"?
good work.
#3
Quote by AmirMaor
nice, very long, maybe change the name to "story of my life"?
good work.


Thanks Amir I've given the name a bit of thought, I might take your advice. It is a bit lengthy...But remembering the lyrics haven't been a problem. I played it night before last for the girl I wrote it about/for and had no issue. (And she loved it! lol)
Last edited by Mainer at Feb 22, 2014,