#1
stun shiver at her stand askew
slide in the very next seat
I can see the appeal of the mood
taken in like a tropical beat

pull up in a leather jacket
sleek shiver shimmer like moon
slick tongue lashing in whimsical
tones with your autotune

we're spinning you moves and flinging you dares until the music gets poor
but by the time we've recalibrated there's a her-shape shadow sprinting out through the door

phase you out with my phrasing
walk into a fumble with words
the tip's in the turn of my cursive
that dropped into your inbox in thirds

pull up in a leather jacket
sleek shiver shimmering black
walking the way that he talks
like he's top of the league and all that

we're spinning you moves and flinging you dares until the prices go up
but by the time we've blagged a deal there's a her-shape shadow sprinting out through the door

you can see her betwixt the smoke and the dark
of course with all the attention she'd never get too far
you can see her between some fella's two arms
and the next thing that you do is shut off your morning alarm

we're spinning you moves and flinging you dares yeah
we're flicking your hair or writing you songs yeah

#2
That was an exceedingly fun read. Very melodic, I thought.

One thing stuck out to me though:

we're spinning you moves and flinging you dares until the prices go up
but by the time we've blagged a deal there's a her-shape shadow sprinting out through the door


As a hook that didn't flow quite as nicely as the first iteration. Know what I mean?

Then again, I feel you probably know this already and moved on

Thank you though for letting us read this.