#1
Here's another song I wrote recently. It's called Darker Side, and it's about a rather unpleasant experience with a girl I used to know. I hope you all enjoy it.

Darker Side

I feel the anger taking hold of me
A sheet of red is all that I can see
I hear her laugh, how can I really know
Is she standing here or am I alone?

Try to forget, try to erase the pain
Do what I can to hide that I’m insane
Look down into the sink, then into the mirror
That’s when I see her smiling ear to ear

Fell for it once but I won’t fall for it again, I don’t know
What I’ll have to do to get you out of my head

You draw them in with that malicious little smile but
Anyone can see you coming from a nautical mile
You hold him close, he’s on the ropes, he’s going down ‘cause what he
Doesn’t know is you’ve had every guy in this town

You’ve got him fooled, he thinks your life is bona fide but what he
Doesn’t know is you’ve got a corruptive darker side

You symbolize all of the aches and pains
That make my blood cold running through my veins
I left you then and you came back again
What you don’t know is you’re a plague inside my head

Fell for it once but I won’t fall for it again I can’t
Believe you think you’re welcome after all the things you said

You draw them in with that malicious little smile but
Anyone can see you coming from a nautical mile
You hold him close, he’s on the ropes, he’s going down ‘cause what he
Doesn’t know is you’ve had every guy in this town

You’ve got him thinking you’re his Bonnie to his Clyde because he
Doesn’t see that you’ve got an immoral darker side

Fell for it once but I won’t fall for it again, I don’t know
What I’ll have to do to get you out of my head

You draw them in with that malicious little smile but
Anyone can see you coming from a nautical mile
You hold him close, he’s on the ropes, he’s going down ‘cause what he
Doesn’t know is you’ve had every guy in this town

You may think that you’re free of any darker side but
Dr. Jekyll, let me tell you you’re a ****ing Mrs. Hyde
#2
To my ears this has a few problems with forced rhymes and too many syllables in a few lines. Just watch out for things like that, and incorporate what you learn into your next song.

Content wise you've got some lovely things going on and plenty of emotion throughout. I'm loving the final stanza. Very raw. Juicy.
#3
Good afternoon. I love the awful feeling of anger that pervades the lyrics. I can see the increasing pace of the rage that you feel against that girl. In my opinion, you should improve in the lenght of the verses.