#1
Apprehensive apparitions, yet arising since...always
Becoming bolder (more belligerent)

Conversational Canines

Definitely defying direct orders now
Explainable extraction executed (whispered lucid me)

Going, Going...go/

Helplessly Hapless
I am the mayor however, the mayor is I

Kimono King, Krispy Kreme, Serene, Scream (help, I am under here)

My mind is my militia (in the war against my phrends)
'No, our mind'

ous for the silence now

Quiet
'Rape her.'

Unknown origin underlying the diagnosis
View:, distort/on, del.usions :- o-f grandyur

Wa.it

Y me? (Y now.)
/-,
,,
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#2
this is kinda sick, i like it
Nerdo-sez-bo wrote:

Bon Jovi can just **** off really.

Life is one big question when your starin at the clock
And the answers always waiting at the liquor store, 40 oz to Freedom
#3
Fun and haunting, like schizo"phrendly"a! It's hard to associate with the very end, except that I know those symbols have an integrated meaning with this fragmentation of what seems like an alternative perspective, a filtered part of reality that is encoded in synchronistic moments. It's like you're trying to make us aware of a cosmic puzzle you've stumbled on.
#4
hmmm, this feels like experimentation for the sake of experimentation. The techniques you're using become the focus of the piece and the only real substance is inferred from these: I guess I'm struggling to get much direction from this.

Don't get me wrong I enjoyed reading this, but I think you could use these techniques more effectively by drawing more links.

Part of the reason I say this is that when I find myself writing like this it tends to be a stepping stone, and a confidence builder, into applying the techniques in my other writing. It is a necessary exercise nonetheless.

It was an enjoyable read anyway man.