#1
I will critique back, of course. Here's a link to the audio:

https://soundcloud.com/brett-rae-1/college-delly-1

It's a bumpy road I'm walkin' on
one day I'm here, and the next I'm gone
I don't know which way I'm goin

Which way's up or which way's down
don't seem to know what life's about
all i know, is that I'm livin

Open wide or eyes closed tight
This day's about as dark as night
don'tcha know, oh don'tcha know,

But I call you and you come
I call you and you come
you show me a piece of me
that I coulda swore was gone

10 o'clock and the city lights
don't make a dent in the rain that night
I don't know what we were thinkin

Gathered around a table for 2
waitress said, "boys what can I do?"
"I don't know, what'll do the trick?"

Two sweet teas and seafood to share
two whole hours of honesty, hey,
I don't know why you care,

But I call you and you come
I call you and you come
you show me a piece of me
that I coulda swore was gone
#2
deli? as in delicatessen?

nice song, very pretty.
Last edited by vocoderboy at Mar 30, 2014,
#3
I like the lyrics, not a big fan of the song. It's not bad, just not my cup of tea.
#4
vocoderboy: yes, as in deli, but it's a restaurant that spells it Delly. I almost spelled it wrong, because I wanted to spell it right...if that makes sense, lol. thanks for the positive feedback

Aoh legend: thanks for the feedback. Is there anything about it that sounds off that makes you not like it? Or is that kind of acoustic stuff just not the stuff you particularly care for? At any rate, thanks for taking the time to read and listen!
#5
It sounds too country for my tastes. I'm sure I'd enjoy it if I liked that kind of music. I did enjoy the lyrics though, so keep up the good work.