#1

[size="3"]these days, more of the same:
simply; i bow in the wind
		like a sigh,
			almost, disparate
			from the atmosphere
	one more agreeable, disposition, smiling
	sort of: without “teeth”./ i start 
	fewer arguments, make
		fewer declarations -

[months longer] i wait:
			whence i arrived, i wait for the car,
		fingering a last few dollars in my pocket
			as if perturbed, by thereof  ‘a’, suggestion,
				gesture: towards::
			
			i have such a long way
			until i have found
			the path back to[/SIZE]
#3
geez, i'm kind of embarrassed that you read this. much of it was influenced by your recent writings. hell, the ending was nearly *stolen* from 'absence'. thanks though. hope i doth not offend thee with mine audacity.
#4
I saw the influence, but I was influenced by other writings before writing my recent poems. You took it and made it into something beautiful. A different beauty that I never would have gotten at.
#5
this is a great poem. I particularly love when people experiment with grammar and spacing... something I haven't truly tried yet.

Question: How did you get this to give you the exact spacing? I tried posting a poem like so but the spacing was the point of it and that was obliterated... which obliterated the meaning of the poem itself. What is the code?
#6
wickwing: if you select 'go advanced' when posting, you'll find on the top toolbar a blue # character that highlights as CODE. select that and put your poem between [C.ODE] and [/C.ODE] (obviously without the periods)
#7
Loving the jumble of the spacing and your use of punctuation in this.

I kinda wish it was a bit longer, as I think you could build up some more layers and it would make the ending even more effective.
#8
This was fantastic.
マリ「しあわっせはーあるいってこないだーからあるいってゆっくんだねーん 
いっちにっちいっぽみーかでさんぽ
 さーんぽすすんでにっほさっがるー 
じーんせいはっわんつー!ぱんち・・・


"Success is as dangerous as failure. Hope is as hollow as fear." - from Tao Te Ching

#9
definitely see some matt in this, and that's a good thing, especially because it still feels like your own.

keep doing interesting things.
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Park that car
Drop that phone
Sleep on the floor
Dream about me
#11
oh yeah, i wasn't even thinking. rushmore = matt as well we have too many matts around here.
Anatomy Anatomy
Whale Blue Review

Park that car
Drop that phone
Sleep on the floor
Dream about me
#15
lovely, perhaps the best I've read from you. look at you go!
(plus, who doesn't steal a bit from Matthew every once in a while? )
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#17
thanks guys. i remember i once asked how this was decided and ZanasCross told me it was decided by a snowball fight or something between Bush and Bob Dole or some shit...

is that dude still aroud? ZanasCross i mean. he was a fellow Kentuckian!