#1
Today while listening to one of my fav records a verse sort of fell into my head and IMO it's cool. I'm sort of struggling to build from there. So far I've got....

Tick tock the clock says two
Grab your keys and slip on your shoes
Let's go for a walk. Well chase the sun
Whatever path we'll have some fun


Hey babe, turn off the tv
Let's sing about how good it is to be free
....


That's all I've got now. Is it worded ok? Where can I go from the 2 lines on verse 2 ?
#2
"...I'll take you to the waterfalls
We'll cross the channel, break these walls"

It's kind of ok but it's not giving me a wow effect. I'm sorry. That's very vague, I know.
Call me Kerouac
#3
Quote by jcscullery
"...I'll take you to the waterfalls
We'll cross the channel, break these walls"

It's kind of ok but it's not giving me a wow effect. I'm sorry. That's very vague, I know.



Thanks. I'll work on the wow factor!