doubtfulsalmon
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Join date: Jan 2011
10 IQ
#2
Oh man that last line.

This feels like part of something bigger though, almost an aside from another piece.

Hang on in there, things will get better.
Bleed Away
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Join date: Feb 2006
70 IQ
#4
Thanks! Yeah, I agree as well. It was originally meant to be the opening lines to a poem that I wanted to write but, I think it, could very well work as a closer to a poem. I felt very strongly about these three lines, so I used them as a stand-alone. I will most likely come back to this and expand.