I can see her, even when I'm awake
the little snow demon that keeps me up at night
She's sitting next to me while I write
trying to hurry me along, so I can go to bed
because she can only hold me in my dreams
goddamn it's hard to read dark green (dark green?) on black! maybe iu need to use UG classic.

anyway, brevity is tough to pull off and here i think you could develop more. i like how this ends, but it would be impactful if it were preceded by greater detail and in general more stuff. still, i like the sketch of this. thanks for the post.