#1
I can see her, even when I'm awake
the little snow demon that keeps me up at night
She's sitting next to me while I write
trying to hurry me along, so I can go to bed
because she can only hold me in my dreams
#2
goddamn it's hard to read dark green (dark green?) on black! maybe iu need to use UG classic.

anyway, brevity is tough to pull off and here i think you could develop more. i like how this ends, but it would be impactful if it were preceded by greater detail and in general more stuff. still, i like the sketch of this. thanks for the post.