#1
Hey there!

I've been killing time recently by writing a few chords on guitarpro and it turned into 50 bars. Have a look and tell me what you thin about that, suggestions are welcome.

I think personally that the lead at the end sounds a bit unpolish and messy. I'll work on that.


ps: if you want me to crit back your song, just post your link in the response, thank you.
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#2
Maybe you already know, but the vocal melody should be much more dynamic. Bars 32-33 I changed the notes to 7-5-5-3 and then a held whole note of 2 for all of bar 33.