#1
I haven't written in quite a while and just wanted to see if anyone had any suggestions or opinions on this song. I did my best to maintain smooth transitions/flow and avoid repetition but you can only do so much in this genre.

If you don't like the genre then don't listen. I am just interested in gathering the opinions of people that would potentially be interested in listening.

Thanks!

Edit: Updated files.
Attachments:
WIP.gp5
WIP.mid
Last edited by xDeV at Jul 9, 2014,
#2
Quote by xDeV
If you don't like the genre then don't listen. I am just interested in gathering the opinions of people that would potentially be interested in listening.

Wow, faggot.
#4
It doesn't really explore any ideas that that deathcore hasn't been exploring for years, but I feel like it actually has a lot of energy to it and a strong vocalist could really make this work. Kind of reminds of a band called This Or The Apocalypse where despite them really not offering anything new at all, they do well at those old ideas and have a lot of energy, so with a strong vocalist up front I still enjoy it quite a lot.
#5
You worship your peers way too much. The best ideas come from outside the limitations you impose on yourself and confining it to just deathcore and having such a 'standard' sounding song and riff style is what kills it for most people listening to this piece.

Suggested listening:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9P4GsF1zdzM

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pZDg1Bnr6Wc

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5tOH4W9Lf98
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#6
Honestly I understand that it's a restricted bit. I enjoy a variety of prog metal bands and they are certainly a better source of inspiration than your run-of-the-mill 'core band. I just got asked to write this style and wanted to see if it was a decent enough go at it. This was by no means an attempt to do something innovative and new. It was an attempt at being standard/normal with a focus on the potential of the music with vocals included. The vocalist is quite excellent by the way :P.

Honestly the biggest influence on this was Thy Art Is Murder and they haven't done anything new EVER, haha. I plan on this being a two-part and progressing into a more versatile sound though. Think along the lines of Northlane. I also dislike having to write bends into my compositions as I always spend too much time trying to get the exact sound I imagine down.

But thank you for the actual opinion(s?).
Last edited by xDeV at Jul 9, 2014,
#7
If you have the time, can you listen to one of my bits, pls?
Attachments:
sunnychugalternate.gp5
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#8
Quote by EpiExplorer
If you have the time, can you listen to one of my bits, pls?


It's excellent. I will give it more of a critique when I get a bit more time.

Edit: I really don't have a whole lot to critique upon completion of the song. The sound is incredibly versatile and fun to listen to. Reminds me a lot of Animals As Leaders without as much aggression.
Last edited by xDeV at Jul 14, 2014,
#9
I liked it.
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#10
Quote by amonamarthmetal
I liked it.


That'll do donkey. Glad to hear at least someone liked it, lol.
#11
Quote by xDeV
Honestly I understand that it's a restricted bit. I enjoy a variety of prog metal bands and they are certainly a better source of inspiration than your run-of-the-mill 'core band. I just got asked to write this style and wanted to see if it was a decent enough go at it. This was by no means an attempt to do something innovative and new. It was an attempt at being standard/normal with a focus on the potential of the music with vocals included.


Sounds legit man.

These forums aren't gonna be the place to get constructive criticism on a piece like this.

Keep doing your thing and see where your writing takes you.
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