#1
[size="2"]went too far;

		and it was as far as the car
			would take us.

in the desert,
a look of guilt creased against
the dusk mountains, red & blazing:
		a sparrow lands on the hood.

	     (“i thought i wanted
		 to go”
		          )

		flaps a limb wing or two
		and flies off;
				
				    away.

funny how you notice ‘em
as they’re leaving. [/SIZE]
#2
I don't like "away.", it doesn't sit well for me in terms of texture and I also think it is too much of a repetition of the previous line. Otherwise I loved this.