#1
The mood is somber
everyone's waiting
for the family to speak
heart is racing

Shallow breathing
palms are sweaty
mind is racing
never forgetting

The scene that day
that found him hanging
lifeless and grey
and everything changing

The room feels of death
my suit like a coffin
my necktie is tight
ironically mocking

His pain has ended
and ours has begun
coming to terms
with what he's done

To be left behind
what a horrible feeling
but he's left us all here
a thing quite revealing

So here we are speaking
of how he loved life
but he ended it early
on that dark lonely night

My necktie is tight
suit like a coffin
read this up there
I'll think of you often
I enjoy laughing, playing guitar, vaginas and basketball.
Last edited by swiftyclown at Apr 24, 2017,
#3
I love this one best, though all of your work is amazing. Continue with that!
#4
"my suit like a coffin" nice line!
Overall great work.
Jimmy cracked corn and I did care.
#5
I really like this one! Especially the first half of it, it has a good "rhythm".
Also, I like the topic you talk about, without leaving a personal opinion of it being right or not (I mean, you don't justify nor condamn it).
#8
I'll try to write more soon.
I enjoy laughing, playing guitar, vaginas and basketball.
Last edited by swiftyclown at Apr 24, 2017,