#1
It's not finished

Dot

We all wander in the dark
Share the finish and the start
The life is closed right in between
If millions passed what do I mean ?

And I'm just a dot in a book of mankind
I've got nothing to lose
So If you want to go and leave me behind
I don't need an excuse

And I'm just a dot in a book of mankind
I've got nothing to lose
So If you want to stay, be mine for tonight
I will not refuse


Like a moth towards the light
To reach our biggest dreams we fight
Sometimes the peak is just too far
And every failure leaves a scar

And I'm just a dot in a book of mankind
I've got nothing to lose
So If you want to go and leave me behind
I don't need an excuse
Last edited by Wisn1a at Aug 12, 2014,
#2
I have no profound critique to offer. I enjoyed reading this. However a pet peeve of mine is that you used "loose" (as in "loose vagina") where I believe you meant "lose". Also "past" should be "passed" if I'm reading that correctly.
Minor adjustments that can be fixed with a quick edit. Thanks for sharing this with us!
I enjoy laughing, playing guitar, vaginas and basketball.
#3
Thank you ! Fixed those now. English is not my native language so I'm having trouble sometimes.