#1
Chorus
I know
Life will always change
It never stays the same, so I just keep moving
Created quite a spark
At a time when I was lonely and afraid of the dark
You might have saved me
But where does that leave me
So now I wish to be
The person that I was
So undeniably me
But now I’ve lost her
Where do I find her?

Verse
You got to fake it till you make it
Hate to say it but let’s face it
I’m about to break
Cant can’t take it
I wish that I could hate you
It would help with my recovery
But every time I think of you I think of all the good in you
But I’m moving on, come on now, slow and steady
Time is moving like molasses does in January
Come on now brother put your brave face on,
No one likes a downer put your game face on
Got the devil on my left side, angel on my right
I’ve been listening to the one that’s been telling me the fight aint worth while
But I got to train my mind to stop from listening,
To all these self-defeating lies it tries to keep on feeding me
But sometimes, I keep replaying through the memories,
And wonder if you’ve managed to get over them so easily
And sometimes, it’s just easier to smile and hide behind it
Then to try and fight these feelings and admit that I am drowning
But I’m getting through it
Yeah I’m keeping busy
Trying to find my passions, trying to learn to make myself happy
I know that nothing else will do to make it last
Can’t remantersize the past
Cause the futures where the gold’s at

Chrous
I know
Life will always change
It never stays the same, so I just keep moving
Created quite a spark
At a time when I was lonely and afraid of the dark
You might have saved me
But where does that leave me
So now I wish to be
The person that I was
So undeniably me
I might have lost her
But I know that I’ll find her

Outro
Whoa- o whoa ohhh X6
Last edited by ShaneB16 at Aug 24, 2014,
#2
Pretty cool. Nice flow, lots of inside rhyme and word-repetition (brave face/game face).
You might want to try and make it a bit less straightforward - make your audience -work- to get the full meaning out of it, don't spell it all out.

What kind of a song will it be? both flow and subject matter give off a vibe of either rap or nu-metal, is that correct?
#3
Thank you. I'll definitely try that out sometime. With regard to the genre I was thinking about something to the effect of an acoustic/nu-metal rap song. The fact that you were able to more or less identify the genre based on lyrics alone makes me happy. So thank you once again
#4
Majority of the songs I write for my sake it helps me relieve my stress express my emotions but its nice that you enjoyed reading about my pain (despite how sad that might of sounded)
#5
meaning full. you have a good writing skill dear. encourage by yourself, Read many book, it really help. Each writers have different style of writing, when we read all those thing you will create your style in yourself and you won't be knowing that
#6
It was my first time visit on the forum and as I am very much fond of music and ofcourse of writing and reading the lyrics, I went through this section and I found the song that you have written as very interesting. You have provided a seperate section for chorus, verse and outro. I think you have the best tune in your mind too.